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Hi!

I just played and completed the demo. It was a nice little experience, the puzzles were fun (though maybe a little too much hand-holding for my taste, but I assume the game’s difficulty will increase as you progress), and the story had me interested. Unfortunately, I also have some critisism, if you don’t mind my sharing.

I thought -D- was unbelievably quick to reveal his position as a leader for a secret rebel organization to a complete stranger. You’d think, with the risk that is apparently involved, that it would be among his top priorities to hide his plans and status as a rebel leader until he had good reason to trust who and what Alum and his intentions were.

As it was required to win it to progress the story, I think it could be a good idea to allow a “skip-option” for the Donkey Kong-ish mini-game. If there’s anything I’ve learned about adventure game purists from my time at this forum, it’s that many of them, if not most (myself included), dislike arcade mini-games, particularly when they cannot be skipped

I’m not natively an English speaker, but I noticed several spelling errors throughout the demo. For example: “the robot has bad eye site”. I can only assume you mean “eye sight”.

I thought the font in the narrated messages (like when you acquire an inventory item) was WAY too big, almost as if designed for people with poor eye site…uhm.. sight!

As for the artwork, I see a lot of room for improvement. It strikes me as a bit amateurish, I’m sorry to say The most prominent area is the incorrect perspective geometry, as you seem to be working without knowing its basic rules. I see you favour one-point perspective (which I personally think is a bad idea to use with adventure game backgrounds as it tends to make for boring, static scenes), but if I were to try and identify the location of the vanishing point in any of your backgrounds, I’d end up with a star map, because they are all over the place. One-point perspective should, as the name indicates, only have one vanishing point. I’d also use more extreme contrast in values to highlight focal points, and to create more depth. There’s definitely potential to the art, there’s nothing wrong with the creativity, but I do believe taking some art lessons could do wonders for you (I hope I am not out of line in saying that, I genuinly mean it as good advice ). Had Alum been a freeware game, I’d be happy with it, but for a commercial game I expect something more.

I hope I’m not coming across too harsh here, I don’t mean any harm (I’m sure part of the point of releasing the Demo is getting feedback, be it good, bad or anything in between). I’ve done my best to be constructive in my critisism. I wish you the best of luck with your continued development and I’m looking forward to seeing the end product By the way, will there be voice acting?