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as i am a very noisy poster i thought of making this thread to avoid troubling PP with my never ending posts and thread and to share here some of my work and ideas

i will start this with a very short story/thought i wrote a couple of years ago and i will be happy if anyone would help me to correct the English/Grammar, and give me his/her opinion.

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.....................Before He Falls Asleep (14-5-2011).......................

In his childhood he had always been told ,
that there is a real thin line between right and wrong.
he made his mind to walk on it.

The line seemed straight at the beginning,
but then it started to make some sudden curves,
but he was walking all the same.

He sometimes could feel the warm breeze of the East,
and in another he felt the cold wind shivering from the West.
But he was determined !
he was just looking ahead.

He always had that urge to look down to see his greatest fear,
but his chin was always up and high, (he felt LOW!)
“but what was so low about feeling high?!” he thinks to himself.

In his journey he had joy,success and hope and most of all he had fears;
the fear of losing his balance.
he was never afraid of traveling but he was afraid of arriving! .

“stability” he murmured!

His father once told him “you can not score the highest grade (10 out of 10) unless you were looking for more”
but what was more than 10 out of 10 anyways!!!
“all i wanted is just 5 ” as long as i can maintain that score,
and it does not go below
,
“i can do this” he said to himself.

He felt he was finally nearing the end,and his heart made a sudden spring!!!,
it was something odd for him ,because he was not used to such feelings,
his legs started to move faster, his body started to swing ;eventually, .....
he loses his balance and… fall,
catches that thin line with both hands; dangling!,
one hand is shaking and the other is tingling.
his grip soften and he goes down..

Down he goes!
Until he reached a top (top of another floor/life).

...that was the last of thoughts before he falls asleep and starts.. dreaming!

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Thanks for reading.

     

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Advie - 29 January 2013 08:19 AM

His father once told him “you can not score the highest grade (10 out of 10) unless you were looking for more”
but what was more than 10 out of 10 anyways!!
“all i wanted is just 5 ” as long as i can maintain my score and it does not go below

this is my fav part Tongue - reminds me of the discussion whether AG should grade games on the scale of 5 or 10 Grin Good work! Do you have music with it?

     

Recently finished: Four Last Things 4/5, Edna & Harvey: The Breakout 5/5, Chains of Satinav 3,95/5, A Vampyre Story 88, Sam Peters 3/5, Broken Sword 1 4,5/5, Broken Sword 2 4,3/5, Broken Sword 3 85, Broken Sword 5 81, Gray Matter 4/5\nCurrently playing: Broken Sword 4, Keepsake (Let\‘s Play), Callahan\‘s Crosstime Saloon (post-Community Playthrough)\nLooking forward to: A Playwright’s Tale

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thanks Diego, no Music ... but i have got this Song which i guess i made under the same influence its called Sometimez

     
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here is a playlist for tracks which are about 15 years old for my Original Band Cartoon KillerZ at MySpace from the Tomorrows LP

http://www.myspace.com/cartoonkillers/music/playlists/tomorrow-39-s-2846844

     
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No Lies Inside (a Song by me) - Cartoon Killer

Enjoy the Video with Cut-Scenes from Several Adventure Games

     
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Here is a another very short story/thought i wrote a while ago and i will be happy if anyone would help me to correct the English/Grammar, and give me his/her opinion.

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.......................I am Alive! (9-10-2009
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He always has the feeling that God loves him,whatever happens God protects,and
if he has even suffered then God will repay him good.

Its like there was something there watching out for him, if he was suffocating, it gave him air.

One day, he wakes up and he just knows;God does not love him anymore!!

He thinks"Just like a cat that had died 6 times before,and only one life (the 7th) left ahead of it”.
He was on his own now!.

He looked forward and the road becomes so blur"Nothing makes sense anymore”. He looks around,with no idea what to look for,and when he looked back, there was Nothing!!
he moved on…

Along his way,he glimpses a spark of light coming from somewhere on a very far horizon. He makes a sudden shift in the road and begins chasing the light and everything…..like a butterly captivated by an oil lamp.

He walks….and walks some more, until he thinks he can really see the source of light…not slowly(mostly running),he kept on.“Let there be light!” he prayed , but that light just blinded his eyes.

He falls down to his knees and drops dead.Feeling the last of his life running out, he prays for mercy. “If i could only have just one more Breath!” He would NOT waste it!!,not for heaven!

He holds on to his diminishing life soo tight!!!

And, for the first time in his life, he wonders “I Am Alive!”.
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Hey Advie. Looking at your two short stories/thoughts it is a bit difficult to tell what they are. They seem a little like lyrics, a little like poetry and a little like notes planning out a story.

For no real reason other than I had a short while to spare at lunchtime I had a go at a quick “paintover” of the first one. I’ve tried to pick up on the “poetry” part.

Don’t get me wrong, what I’ve written isn’t very good or structured or cohesive or finished, but maybe it will give you some ideas? (not that i’m an expert or particularly worth listening to anyway!). I’m not sure I really understood what you were going for but I had fun doing it anyway so thought I might as well post it.

Before sleep took him

As a child he was always told,
The line between right and wrong was thin.
He set his feet to walk it.

At first the line held straight and true,
Only to throw up sudden curves,
But all the same he walked it.

Through every easy eastern breeze
and wintry western wind, he was determined.
His eyes he fixed ahead and walked it.

Though fear’s temptation sought his gaze beneath,
his head he kept held high,
e’en feeling low he’d walk it.

Through triumph, joy and hope, one fear;
His balance to maintain. Afraid, not of the travelling,
But of the destination.

Stability was his desire,
the earthly heights, when longing’s denied,
lead only to despair

Assurance of attainable good
Trumped vainglorious dreams of more,
In safety he would have it.

With, at last, his ends in sight
His heart leapt from it’s prior calm
With heady novelty he runs…

And stumbles,

slipping from the line.

Panting, grasping, falling down
By fingertips he’s dangling

The wire like line he cannot hold
His bleeding, shaking hands release
He drops, down away from it.

Until he lands, how far below?
Atop a plane which stretched afar.
Another line, another name,
Another time to endure.

However high, however far
a journey could be made,
the end result can only be
Down.

And then sleep took him.

     

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Intense , thanks for that paintover,, it really suggests beyond just liking Wink .. i am flattered .
i liked it, also maybe really i could use it now as its lyrical structure for a new song.
i will post a demo (at least) whenever i can put these words into nice melody
and chords harmony ..

Intense Degree - 28 February 2013 10:59 AM

Looking at your two short stories/thoughts it is a bit difficult to tell what they are. They seem a little like lyrics, a little like poetry and a little like notes planning out a story.

Totally exactly ,.. but i never though intended to create a kind of any form ,it had seemed to me those writings like describing the secs one might remember sometimes of his day dreams before getting into sleeping and actually start dreaming , more abstract of all where,when and how elements !

     
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blabbermouth.net on my Band Cartoon Killers

↓ that is glimpse of the article ,follow the link above if want to read it all..

“A real milestone was reached on the milestone day that THE CARTOON KILLERS found their cassettes sold in kiosks — normally the turf of big boys like AMR DIAB, old favorites like OUM KALTHOUM and dodgy copies of imported easy listening. ”

Please Join/Like my Fan Page on FB if you like .. if i can get to 1,000 likes before the end of June i will be able to participate to play in Madrid with many Indie artists/talents from all over the world that can lead to get Signed with EMI Music Spain S.A.

http://www.facebook.com/AmgadShebl?fref=ts

Thanks for reading this.

 

 

     
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—————————Sad portrait (25-10-2011)———-

She cries all the time,she keeps crying until falls asleep.

When she is asleep her pillow was soaked and her cheeks were smudged.

She might have had dreams of floating clouds soaking ground,
but she would not remember when wakes up.

She wakes up and not able to open her eyes,
They were stuck, shit tight!
In a few minutes they would open, then she would be able to cry ..again.

Her tears sometimes ran dry, but still she weeps,
like a sad portrait.

In no time, she had two dark deep canals under both eyes
that already were changing color; turning from blue to a light blue.

She would not eat, but she would drink.

Doctors say that if she keeps on this way, she can lose her sight or more
.. her life !.

Even though she lost weight and lots of tears, she
had a long life; her loss was far behind.

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In few Days starting from the 1st of April ‘til the 5th; CarTOoN KiLleR’s Tracks ALL will be AVAILABLE to DOWNLOAD FREE ..for the 2 years passed since my Release of the Wizard n’ Glass Album .

https://www.reverbnation.com/Advie

     

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Ready to download

what i wrote on the Fan Page:
http://www.facebook.com/AmgadShebl?fref=ts

For three years Wizard n’ Glass album had never left the Top 10 Chart , not for Egypt but even for my Hometown DE, many artists waaaay better went down and never came again to the Top 10, So .. I Do/Can NOT claim that this achievement is for my talent as much as it is for my Fans ... i really Love every one who ever supported me in Egypt ,Germany and Globally ...
and as payback for my fans i Submitted the Songs for Free exclusive fans download .. your love would never be compared to the one Dollar and Half i get from Buying each of my Songs ,by Any Chance…

at last i am sorry about the delay of my 3rd Album release (Witch o’ Doubt) that i talked about almost a year ago, but as much i have gone more than 60 % through the Development of the Album , i been feeling Reckless about Recording new stuff for a while/lately ..
i dont dont know when this phase will end but i am sure that the Witch will blow up the Wizard someday and very soon..Smile)
Thanks Again for your support that without i would have forgotten about my 23 years of music dedication .

Regards,

Migo/Advie C.K

     
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CARTOON KILLER - Wizard n’ Glass, is Num#1 at the German Rock Reverbnation’ Charts !!!!

Thanks everyone whoever supported me!

     

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Congratulations! Smile
Your music sounds really professional.
Ever thought about doing a soundtrack for an adventure game?

     
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Shnubble - 16 January 2014 03:26 PM

Congratulations! Smile
Your music sounds really professional.
Ever thought about doing a soundtrack for an adventure game?

That would be the day , I would lay down ,rest in peace with no feeling to do anything more Smile
Thanks Shnubble

     

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