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Old 01-30-2008, 12:21 PM   #1
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For a class in Music Theory, I'm assigned the task of writing two songs. One traditional song, and a song in pop/rock-style. Both are allowed to be instrumental (so I don't really need any lyrics), but I realised that there are poets in this forum that might enjoy writing some lyrics, so I'm throwing the question out there. Post your lyrics here in this thread if you're interested.

The traditional song must be in AABA-form, so the lyrics should fit that.

The pop/rock-song can have both verse(s) and refrain. A bridge is also ok.

Edit: I will of course post the results here if this gives any result.
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Old 01-30-2008, 12:26 PM   #2
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I don't know any ABBA songs. Sorry.
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Old 01-30-2008, 12:31 PM   #3
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Not ABBA. AABA, where A is one part of the form, and B another.
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How traditional is traditional? Are we talking medieval folksong?

And the pop song thing is easy for me. Got a theme you'd like explored?
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Old 01-30-2008, 01:08 PM   #5
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Default The Morning Dew [AABA; Traditional]

You brave young lads and true
Tell the ladies what you must do
To win their hearts
Before you must part
For we march with the morning dew.

You fine young lads who bear arms
Lay them down so none come to harm
Tonight we dance
Drink and romance
Give yourself to a lady's charms.

For the fields are calling, good men
The fields are calling you
There may be no tomorrow for some
Save for the honourable few.

You brave young lads and true
Tell the world what you must do
To win the day
In the battles fray
When we march with the morning dew.

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Old 01-30-2008, 01:12 PM   #6
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No, not medieval. I can't think of any good international examples at the moment, but some of the main differences between this one and the other are in the harmonic structure, straight rhythms, flexible tempo, a melody that follows the lyrics.

As for themes, I have no suggestions.

Edit: Wow, lyrics appeared while I was typing this post. That one can work. Thanks.
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Old 01-30-2008, 01:36 PM   #7
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Default All Your Tomorrows [AABAAB or AABACB; Pop/Rock]

You can call it what you will
The things you do can't be explained
All of your rationalization
Can't make it right again.

You say you tell it like it is
You've got it all figured out
But when the truth is revealed
Your words are cast in doubt.

And of your tomorrows
Are built on selfish lies
A shameless thoughtlessness
You can't disguise
Yes all of your tomorrows
Are just the same as yesterday
You've nothing new to offer
Anyway.

You may wonder what you've lost
In the corner of your mind
But you never come to grips
With the truth you find.

You want the world to carry you
Think you're entitled to the prize
But the world will let you down
Why do you look surprised?

And all of your tomorrows
Are going to get you in the end
When all the things you've done
You can't defend
Yes all of your tomorrows
Are going to finally make you pay
You'll be wishing you could take back
Yesterday.

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Old 01-30-2008, 01:42 PM   #8
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Heh, I changed a line there at the start midway through the writing, and it occurs to me that I lost the rhyme. Lemme think a second...

ETA: Got it.
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Really like the morning dew. Beautiful text.
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Not ABBA. AABA, where A is one part of the form, and B another.
Not had the time to look at this properly. When you say "form" do you mean rhyming scheme (as in first, second and fourth lines rhyme. Third doesn't) or something else. Lee's offerings suggest not. I can't guarantee producing anything (is there a deadline on this?) but I want to make sure it fits what you need if I do.
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Here's a rock ballad to be going on with anyway.

Now that you’re gone – an angsty rock ballad for Trum Bon Jovi.

Dull echoes mark the falling of my hot tears
I cry myself to sleep most every day
Wake ev’ry morning, have to face my worst fears
The awful truth that you have gone away

CHORUS
Now that you’re gone, my world is dark and lonely
Now that you’re gone, my whole life feels so wrong
I’m sorry that I hurt you, and wish I could have you back
That’s why I put my feelings in this song.

Was my suspicious mind led to your going
My constant accusations were not just
Forgive a jealous fool for never knowing
He’d found a girl that he could truly trust

CHORUS

The day you left me I could not believe it
How had something so good turned out so bad?
Threw love away, please babe let me retrieve it
Don’t leave me lying here so very sad.

CHORUS

If you come back then please do not deride me
Swear I’ll do all I can so we’ll not part
Do everything to keep you there beside me
Hold a warm place for you inside my heart

MODIFIED FINAL CHORUS
Now that you’re gone, my world is dark and lonely
Now that you’re gone, my whole life feels so wrong
You know the score, can’t take no more, so babe what do you say?
Please answer quickly to my woeful song.
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If I remember my music history correct, the song you wrote Step, is: ABABABAC
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I have to write a Benchmarking report on the efficiency and Cost Effectivness of a Finance Unit.

Anyone want to write it for me?

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I have to write a Benchmarking report on the efficiency and Cost Effectivness of a Finance Unit.

Anyone want to write it for me?

Well, I could make my songs instrumental so it's not really the same thing. (And I didn't understand that sentence anyway, so I couldn't write it for you even if I wanted to.)

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Not had the time to look at this properly. When you say "form" do you mean rhyming scheme (as in first, second and fourth lines rhyme. Third doesn't) or something else.
Rhyming is irrelevant. The guidelines I have to follow are all about the music, and I'm not adding any additional constraints to you. Lee's first song fits the form. (And note that the pop/rock song doesn't have that form requirement.)

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I can't guarantee producing anything (is there a deadline on this?) but I want to make sure it fits what you need if I do.
Thanks for the rock ballad. Now I have a choice between two good ones for the pop/rock song. There is no deadline for me (well, there was one originally, but it's long passed by now) so the only deadline that exists is that the lyrics should be posted here before the time when I choose one and write some music. (And I don't know when that'll be. Maybe this weekend, maybe next.)

There are already more lyrics posted here than what I need for this assignment (and I like them all enough to use), but don't let that stop you. Maybe there'll be more music written than what's necessary.
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I have to write a Benchmarking report on the efficiency and Cost Effectivness of a Finance Unit.

Anyone want to write it for me?

I could do you a poem about benchmarking and cost effectiveness, would that be any help?
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You can't own a copyright on lyrics. When multiple people write a song together, they each own part of the rights to the song as a whole. At least that's how I heard it works.
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You can't own a copyright on lyrics. When multiple people write a song together, they each own part of the rights to the song as a whole. At least that's how I heard it works.
Actually, I claim copyright on all of my written work, and I've designated usage rights for these specific pieces. Trumgottist is free to use them for his class. That's as far as it goes. Anyone wishing to use said lyrics for anything else has to ask permission. Or, you know, pay me. Because I'm not actually as cheap as I may seem here. People get paid to do this stuff. People like me. I just chose to do someone a favour. Just this once. I didn't declare it Creative Commons, and I didn't reserve all rights. I gave Trum specific right to use it for this project. Nothing else.

And believe me, writers can copyright their work. That's what copyright was originally intended for, so writers (and publishers, of course) can take credit and get paid. It's only modern usage by corporations that has people confused. Perhaps one day copyright will be done away with completely, and writers will have to use some other form of usage protection. Perhaps Creative Commons. But until that day, Trum can use this for his class. Everyone else has to ask. I decide who uses my writing and where.

Now that I've played Gestapo about copyright law, I'm gonna go do some graphic design for a meeting tomorrow. If there are any copyright lawyers in the room who care to tell us how this really works, I'll be happy to amend my posts.

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So I can't record myself singing your lyrics in funny voices? Damn.

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Lee's first song fits the form.
Maybe I should add another clarification to that, since there's been much confusion on what I meant. Lee's will work, but they don't have to be that long. I still can't think of a good non-Swedish example (maybe because it's meant to be in the style of a traditional Swedish song), but here's a YouTube clip of Värmlandsvisan as an illustration.

Here are the lyrics:

(A) Ack, Värmeland,
du sköna, du härliga land,
du krona bland Svea rikes länder!
(A) Och komme jag än mitt i
det förlovade land,
till Värmland jag ändock återvänder.
(B) Ja, där vill jag leva, ja, där vill jag dö.
(A) Om en gång ifrån Värmland
jag tager mig en mö,
så vet jag att jag mig aldrig ångrar.
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