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Old 05-04-2006, 01:02 PM   #89
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"A warm light is flowing out this window". ~~~~ Should be:-
"A warm light is flowing out of this window".

However, if you intend to correct this, better would be:-
"A friendly (or welcoming, or pleasant) light is shining out of this window".


Added later:-
A nitpick I know, but although not exactly an error, I can't imagine any English speaking person saying ...............
"I don't want to make the cook upset" ~~~~ but rather:-
"I don't want to upset the cook"!


Later still ... and even nitpickier!
Even if I was smaller, it would be ......... ~~~~ Better (conditional):-
Even if I were smaller, it would be ..........

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